Tuesday, September 17, 2013

The Four Letter Word I Must Avoid in My Writing


I hope I didn’t shock you with the title. Then again, maybe a little shock treatment is in order.

Since I started writing this blog, I have spent considerable time each week studying and learning my craft. It’s a process.


Writing is a Learning Process 

I read blogs about writing. I take notes from my critique group. I listen carefully to my editor. During the course of the year, I have encountered at least six blogs and had at least three discussions with my fellow writers about words and phrases authors use that weaken their writing. I have researched the topic and read several good articles on strengthening my writing.

I never professed to be a quick learner.

A week or so ago, my editor made a note along the side of my manuscript. It read, in effect, never use the word “just.” Avoid it.

Just?

I knew that.

I knew it, I just didn’t put it into practice.

Just is a four letter word (literally) that serves only to weaken your writing. I took the lesson to heart and applied those words of wisdom not only to my first novel, but also to my current Work In Progress (WIP): Livvie’s Cuppa Joe.

I typed the word “just” into the window allowing me to “Search in Document.” Want to take a guess at how many times I employed the offensive word? Ninety-six times. That means there are ninety-six sentences in my story where my writing is not as strong as I like it.

A few I’ll keep. I’ll keep the word if it is absolutely necessary to carry the meaning of the sentence. I may keep one or two in dialogue.  I’ll delete most of them and some of them I’ll change, finding a new word that enhances the meaning of the text and drives the story forward. 


Would you like to sit in on the edits?

Here are a few examples. in each I show the original (old) and my revised version (new):

#1 For this passage, I deleted the word. The meaning remains intact. The writing is stronger for it.

 “No dinner. No food. They just sold plain old coffee, but had a great business doing it. My dad says I should just keep things status quo for a while,”Sonja told her friend. (old)

 “No dinner. No food. They sold plain old coffee, but had a great business doing it. My dad says I should keep things status quo for a while,” Sonja told her friend. (new)


#2 In this example, I deleted the word, but also split the sentence.

At the Pavilion, some of her aunt friends were playing cards and others were just sitting around tables talking. (old)

At the Pavilion, some of her aunt’s friends were playing cards. Others were sitting around the tables talking. (new)


# 3 Try these next three on your own. What would you do? Do you need the word “just” to make the sentence work?

Sonja wasn’t sure about the fourth building. It appeared to be just a house. There was no sign out front, only a white picket fence.

Cassie arrived on the doorstep of the coffee shop promptly at four o’clock just as Joan had predicted.

“So what did Joe do for baked goods last summer?” Sonja began wrapping the tea sets in newspaper and carefully placing it in a box that had just this morning contained Sonja’s collection of sweaters.


“Just” seems to be a word I hold dear. I’m learning to let go.


Below, I’ve listed a couple of sites you may find helpful in identifying words and phrases that weaken your own writing. The first offers replacements.


Jeff Goins+ examines five words that should be avoided in your writing.


Hold your current WIP up to the magnifying glass and see what words and phrases keep cropping up for you.

Then scroll down to the comment section and share those problem words you use and abuse. It should be fun to see the list we create.

5 comments:

  1. "Just" and "suddenly" seem to be my problem words. What are yours?

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  2. Great post. That and just are big bugaboos I have to work on.
    Here is my take on #3.

    Sonja wasn’t sure about the fourth building was it a house or a store? There was no sign out front, only a white picket fence.(I reworded this sentence.)

    Cassie arrived on the doorstep of the coffee shop promptly at four o’clock as Joan had predicted.(deleted just here.)

    “So what did Joe do for baked goods last summer?” Sonja began wrapping the tea sets (plural?)in newspaper and carefully placing it(singular?) in a box that had just this morning contained Sonja’s collection of sweaters.
    (Because I don't have the whole scene to look at I might leave just if it shows how quickly she packs and unpacks things.However you need to change the grammar of the sentence- is this one tea set or several. It is singular. I went with singular. I don't know if the box is important or just showing action. If showing only action I would revise it: Sonja began wrapping the tea set in newspaper and carefully placing it in a box.)
    I found lots of that and just in my manuscript that got the ax or reworked. Ly words are tougher to rework with stronger words.

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  3. Great ideas here. "that" and "just." Glad to know I'm not alone. And a good catch on the whole plural/singular bit. "Just" a typo. It wis one set.

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  4. What a great post, Rebecca. I'm even more guilty... with 102 "just" though only 3 "suddenly". I know "that" is another one to avoid whenever possible. Thanks for the reminder and the links. Well worth noting. :)

    I knew you wouldn't use coulourful language but thought you might refer to books that do. Recently I downloaded a book highly recommended to me. I wasn't very far into it when I same across God's name (not used in prayer). Thankful for the 'search' feature on my Kindle, I searched 3 words, God's name, His Son's name and another word I don't dare repeat. There were over 100 instances of it in the book. I have no idea what other colourful words were used but I deleted the book.

    It's sad that very gifted writers mar their stories by doing this. I strongly believe more people would buy their books if they didnt have offensive language in it.

    Blessings, Renee-Ann <><

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  5. Thank you, Renee-Ann. First, you are a faithful reader and I so appreciate your attention to my blog. I also thank you for your comments and for trusting me to not use vulgar language!

    I'm with you. A good book doesn't need foul language or to throw God's name about without reverence to be good. I read a book in graduate school called Make Every Word Count. I think it was by Peter Elbow, but I'm not 100% sure. The title stuck with me, though.

    Hope your book is progressing well. Can't wait to read a good courtroom drama.

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